Agent Interview: Denise Barone

by Lisa Gail Green

Lisa here with the second in our Agent Interview Series. I’m happy to introduce you all to Denise Barone of the Barone Literary Agency!

Let’s jump right in, shall we?

What is it about a manuscript that excites you?

Good, clean writing that has been well edited.

What are some things you love to see in a query?

If I know you’ve been published elsewhere—it can be anything, a university press, a small e-press, a magazine article, etc.—it helps me a lot, because it tells me you’re serious and that you know what you’re doing. Unfortunately, I may still end up having to turn you down, but I will hold onto your query long after I’ve told others no, to give your query more consideration, and to possibly change my mind and say yes.

What are some of the worst things you’ve seen in a query?

I don’t need to hear about your platform, what a wonderful film/TV series/Miniseries/sitcom/dotcom/romcom/dopecom your story will, make; I don’t need you to tell me the relentless efforts you will undergo to make sure you flog every person you meet into making them buy your book—I don’t want to read any of that nonsense, although in a way it does help me, because it tells me you do NOT know what you’re doing. All I care about is the writing. If you can’t write, you can flog away, but nobody’s going to buy your book.

Are you an editorial agent?

Yes, most certainly, I am an editorial agent. I’ve learned a tremendous amount about writing and editing in the years that I’ve also been writing, and I like to share my knowledge with my writers. I wish I had more time to edit their work, but I will take a client’s story to a certain point, and then tell the writer to go and edit some more along the lines I’ve pointed out to her. If a writer is making a certain kind of editing/writing mistake on page 10, she’s still making it on page 100, and it isn’t a good use of my time to edit all the way to page 100, because my writers are smart and can edit themselves. For every minute that I work on a client’s manuscript, I expect that client will end up working an hour on edits. If I spend an hour with your manuscript, it’s going to take you at least ten hours to do a thorough pass-through, taking your time and fixing the story and making it good.

Really good info! Thank you, Denise.

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Lisa Gail Green

Lisa Gail Green lives with her husband the rocket scientist and their three junior mad scientists in Southern California. She writes books so she can have an excuse to live in the fantasy world in her head. She likes to share these with readers. She has a parrot but would most definitely get a werewolf for a pet if she weren't allergic.

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Posted: Jun 19, 2014

Category: Imported from AYAP

Tags: Literary Agents | What Agents Want

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The Heart of your story is the main character. The protagonist is the beating core that truly brings your story to life. If your MC doesn't make kids (and their grown-ups) care within the first few pages, your story will flatline. </p>
<p>Your main character needs to be:<br />
• Relatable enough for kids to see themselves<br />
• Unique enough to stand out in the slush pile<br />
• Active enough to drive the story<br />
• Memorable enough to survive multiple readings at bedtime</p>
<p>Where do you find this amazing donor heart? It might be the very thing you loved so much about the manuscript you want to revive. It might be the younger sister from your shelved YA novel. Or maybe it’s the hilarious kid you blogged about meeting at a school visit. Find a character beating with potential and place it in the center of your story.<br />

The Brain of your story is the theme or central message. The theme is the big idea that controls everything else. Picture books are more than stories - they're tiny life lessons disguised with humor and heart.</p>
<p>But your theme needs to be:<br />
• Subtle enough not to trigger the dreaded "didactic" rejection<br />
• Clear enough for a four-year-old to grasp<br />
• Universal enough to speak to both kids and adults<br />
• Fresh enough to prevent agents and editors from responding with "Not another sharing/bedtime/first-day story!"</p>
<p>Check your other dead manuscripts to see if there is a recurring theme, something that really seems to be speaking to you. Find the bit of poetry you scribbled on the back of a receipt to see what theme inspired it. Reread the pep talk you texted your critique partner at 1am. Pick the theme that will drive your story, giving it purpose, direction, and deeper meaning.<br />

The Legs of your story is the plot. Not to be confused with a grave plot.🤪 The plot is what keeps everything upright and moving, as well as providing support for all the other elements. You have very few words to use in a picture book, so you need to do a lot with each plot point.</p>
<p>In general, your plot should:<br />
• Hook readers fast<br />
• Build tension that a child can follow<br />
• Create page turns that feel natural<br />
• Wrap up in a way that satisfies</p>
<p>You can borrow a plot twist (a leg) from one manuscript and the opening (the other leg) from a different manuscript. Consider if the subplot of the middle grade novel you trunked would work better as a picture book. Or maybe your Facebook post about a disastrous camping trip could become a story for kids. Just keep putting one foot in front of the other until you have your storyline.

The Arms of your story are the side characters.

The Torso of your story is the setting. Setting helps a story breathe and connects all the elements of the story. It isn't just where your story lives, it's what makes your story ALIVE. It's the difference between "this happened in a park" and "this happened in that park, the one with the twisty slide that burns your legs and the creaky swing that sounds like a baby crying.”</p>
<p>Your setting should:<br />
• Make your character's world feel real<br />
• Contain your story in a way that makes sense to young readers<br />
• Connect different scenes and moments organically<br />
• Give your illustrator enough room to add visual subplots</p>
<p>Half-finished manuscripts are a great place to dig up settings, since you worked out the place details before the plot petered out. Or maybe you had to cut a second fantastic location from your chapter book. You can also revisit the detailed caption from your Instagram carousel documenting your tour of that delish candy shop. Disinter a robust setting that can house all of your story's vital organs.

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