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Query Letter #43

by Martina Boone

Query Letter #43
Author: Britt Leigh
Genre: YA
Title: Shot on the Wing

Dear Ms. LaPolla:

Calling foul is quick-witted17-year-old Angela Bennett’s favorite part of being a reporter, but when she exposes a varsity basketball recruiting scandal, she finds herself out of bounds with the team, the public, and worst of all, her crush, the Ian, star of the JV team.Told entirely through varied media – class notes, bathroom wall graffiti, blogs, and even news scrawl – Shot on the Wing gives you the scoop from every angle.

Angela’s assignment: the BirchDown BullDogs basketball team. While the town glorifies the varsity players, covering them is not exactly how Angela envisioned launching her reporting career. But the adorkable and athletic Ian at least gets her romantic life on the court. When Angela accidentally leaves her still-hot tape recorder in the office after an interview with the varsity coach, she stumbles upon a college recruitment scandal involving sex, money, and drugs. Angela must find her voice to raise up the truth.

Shot on the Wing is a 33,000-word young adult novel, a project originated in the mentorship portion of the Master of Fine Arts in Writing for Children program at Simmons College. It draws upon my passions and studies from my degree in Journalism from the University of Florida. My writing for young adults has been featured in Chicken Soup for the Soul: Teens Talk Getting into College with the story “It’s a Sure Bet” and “Sweater Girl” in Chicken Soup for the Soul: Teens Talk Middle School, and online at http://blog.saintmariasmessenger.com/. I am a member of the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators.

Enthusiastically,

Britt Leigh

Martina Boone

Martina Boone is the award-winning author of the romantic southern gothic Heirs of Watson Island series, starting with COMPULSION from Simon & Schuster, Simon Pulse and the Celtic Legends Collection of novels set in Scotland, Cornwall, and Ireland beginning with LAKE OF DESTINY. She’s passionate about improving lives through literacy and the love of books, and she runs the Compulsion For Reading program to distribute books to underserved schools and libraries.

She lives with her husband, children, Shetland Sheepdog Phinney, and Zoey the lopsided cat, and she enjoys writing contemporary romantic fiction with a hint of magic set in small towns and beautiful places. When she isn’t writing, she’s addicted to travel, horses, skiing, chocolate flavored tea, and anything with Nutella on it.

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Posted: Sep 30, 2010
Category: Imported from AYAP
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The Heart of your story is the main character. The protagonist is the beating core that truly brings your story to life. If your MC doesn't make kids (and their grown-ups) care within the first few pages, your story will flatline. </p> <p>Your main character needs to be:<br /> • Relatable enough for kids to see themselves<br /> • Unique enough to stand out in the slush pile<br /> • Active enough to drive the story<br /> • Memorable enough to survive multiple readings at bedtime</p> <p>Where do you find this amazing donor heart? It might be the very thing you loved so much about the manuscript you want to revive. It might be the younger sister from your shelved YA novel. Or maybe it’s the hilarious kid you blogged about meeting at a school visit. Find a character beating with potential and place it in the center of your story.<br />
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