Top 25 Entries Announced in the Pitch Plus One Contest!

by Lisa Gail Green

We interrupt this regularly scheduled post to share the 25 titles that have progressed to the author round in the Pitch Plus One contest.

It’s the post you’ve all been waiting for! First a reminder that our hope in doing this contest is that you will receive valuable feedback that will help you hone your work so that it catches an agent/editor’s attention. You’ve all shown bravery for putting your work out there, and if your manuscript is not on the list below it does not mean it isn’t great. Writing and publishing are subjective.

Now, the rules!

Revised pitches and first pages are due back to us at ayapcontest at gmail dot com by Sunday at Noon. High noon. Please include:

Name: Your Name

Email: Your Email

Title: Book Title

Genre: Age and Genre

Length: Manuscript word count

Pitch: Pitch of no more than 150 words

First Page: First page of no more than 250 words.

Note we’ve added word count and the whole first page.
Subject line should read Pitch Plus 1 top 25 Entry: Entry #XXX Title

ONLY ONE EMAIL per person please. It gets confusing when I get twelve versions from eight people. I know you’re excited, but take the time to review the above two items before pressing send.

They will be posted Monday by 8PM EST.

You may comment on each others posts. The authors will do so sometime this week at their discretion up to NOON ON FRIDAY. Remember these are published authors donating their time to give you guidance. 😀

Again, the judges will fill out score cards and a discrepancy judge will be available if there’s an issue. The results will be tabulated and announced next Saturday morning. The top 10 will go on to the agent round.

Now what you’re all waiting for. Or have already scrolled down to so you could check the list first. In no particular order:

Defy the Stars
Paloma and the Bow Wow Bar Mitzvah
Gerald and the Amulet of Zonrach
Class Clown
Camp Cammoodle
Something Wicked
A Serpent in the Garden
Where there is Dark
Luma
Roger Firebug
The Unbelievable Misadventures of Avery Mann
Becoming Hook
Don Q. Oatney – Vampire Hunter
Witches Brew
Ivan and the Grey Wolf
See You Then, Joshua Jacobs
If I promise you the sun
Twist of Fate
Darkenwear Inc.: Feathers vs. Scales
Words in the Windowsill
Love and the Bard
Leaving Peacesylvania
Heritage Blade
Nanny Morto
Conduit

Lisa Gail Green

Lisa Gail Green lives with her husband the rocket scientist and their three junior mad scientists in Southern California. She writes books so she can have an excuse to live in the fantasy world in her head. She likes to share these with readers. She has a parrot but would most definitely get a werewolf for a pet if she weren't allergic.

Post © Lisa Gail Green and/or Adventures in YA Publishing. All rights reserved.

Posted: Mar 1, 2014

Category: Imported from AYAP

Tags: #contests | Pitch

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He points to the right side of the screen and a new scene slides in of a castle science/magic storage room. There are various cartoon Frankenstein body parts scattered around. Some of them have a yellow glow. If you click on them, the images below appear (I’ve added alt text to them, so I hope it works).

The Heart of your story is the main character. The protagonist is the beating core that truly brings your story to life. If your MC doesn't make kids (and their grown-ups) care within the first few pages, your story will flatline. </p>
<p>Your main character needs to be:<br />
• Relatable enough for kids to see themselves<br />
• Unique enough to stand out in the slush pile<br />
• Active enough to drive the story<br />
• Memorable enough to survive multiple readings at bedtime</p>
<p>Where do you find this amazing donor heart? It might be the very thing you loved so much about the manuscript you want to revive. It might be the younger sister from your shelved YA novel. Or maybe it’s the hilarious kid you blogged about meeting at a school visit. Find a character beating with potential and place it in the center of your story.<br />

The Brain of your story is the theme or central message. The theme is the big idea that controls everything else. Picture books are more than stories - they're tiny life lessons disguised with humor and heart.</p>
<p>But your theme needs to be:<br />
• Subtle enough not to trigger the dreaded "didactic" rejection<br />
• Clear enough for a four-year-old to grasp<br />
• Universal enough to speak to both kids and adults<br />
• Fresh enough to prevent agents and editors from responding with "Not another sharing/bedtime/first-day story!"</p>
<p>Check your other dead manuscripts to see if there is a recurring theme, something that really seems to be speaking to you. Find the bit of poetry you scribbled on the back of a receipt to see what theme inspired it. Reread the pep talk you texted your critique partner at 1am. Pick the theme that will drive your story, giving it purpose, direction, and deeper meaning.<br />

The Legs of your story is the plot. Not to be confused with a grave plot.🤪 The plot is what keeps everything upright and moving, as well as providing support for all the other elements. You have very few words to use in a picture book, so you need to do a lot with each plot point.</p>
<p>In general, your plot should:<br />
• Hook readers fast<br />
• Build tension that a child can follow<br />
• Create page turns that feel natural<br />
• Wrap up in a way that satisfies</p>
<p>You can borrow a plot twist (a leg) from one manuscript and the opening (the other leg) from a different manuscript. Consider if the subplot of the middle grade novel you trunked would work better as a picture book. Or maybe your Facebook post about a disastrous camping trip could become a story for kids. Just keep putting one foot in front of the other until you have your storyline.

The Arms of your story are the side characters.

The Torso of your story is the setting. Setting helps a story breathe and connects all the elements of the story. It isn't just where your story lives, it's what makes your story ALIVE. It's the difference between "this happened in a park" and "this happened in that park, the one with the twisty slide that burns your legs and the creaky swing that sounds like a baby crying.”</p>
<p>Your setting should:<br />
• Make your character's world feel real<br />
• Contain your story in a way that makes sense to young readers<br />
• Connect different scenes and moments organically<br />
• Give your illustrator enough room to add visual subplots</p>
<p>Half-finished manuscripts are a great place to dig up settings, since you worked out the place details before the plot petered out. Or maybe you had to cut a second fantastic location from your chapter book. You can also revisit the detailed caption from your Instagram carousel documenting your tour of that delish candy shop. Disinter a robust setting that can house all of your story's vital organs.

After you press the Click When Done circle button, the lights flash with the sound of electricity buzzing. Then the screen goes black and lightning zaps across the screen with the sound of thunder.

The screen then lights up to show the storage room, and all the Frankenstein pieces have been assembled into the whole monster. An upbeat song plays in the background. Then a speech bubble pops up with the words, “I’m alive! I’M ALIVE!” Then the screen goes to black.

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